So, what is the problem?
那么，这个问题是什么呢？
Once you have your opinion, once you've decided agree or disagree, say so once. Okay?
一旦你们有了自己的观点，一旦你们决定了赞成还是不赞成，只说一次你们的观点。
Use this pronoun: "I agree", "I think", "I believe", "In my opinion" one time in the entire essay.
这些代词"I agree", "I think", "I believe", "In my opinion"在整篇作文里只用一次。
Do not say: "I think" two, three, four times, don't say it twice in the introduction, and then again in the conclusion.
不要说"I think"两次、三次、四次，不要在开头说两次，然后在结尾又说一次。
Say it one time in the introduction if that's where your thesis is.
如果你们的论点在开头的话，就在那儿说一次。
That's it, you're done, don't use the word: "I", "my", "me", "mine" any more in your essay.
就这样，结束，不要再在你们的作文里用"I", "my", "me", "mine"这样的单词了。
The only time you can repeat the personal pronoun is if you have a very personal task question.
你们唯一能重复这种人称代词的时候是在你们有一个很个人的题目的时候。
Would you prefer to live in the city or the country?
你更愿意住在城市还是农村？
Okay, in that case, you can use "I", or "me", or "my" a few times, but even then, you don't need to, so don't.
在这种情况下，你们可以用几次"I"或者 "me"或者"my"，但即使在这种时候，你们也不需要这么做，所以不要这么做。
One time, give me your opinion, that's it, don't give me any more.
一次，阐述你们的观点，就一次，之后就不要再说了。
Now, what happens is I see quite often in the introduction, I see people say: "I think that A, B, C, which is why I believe C, D, E, F." Whatever.
事情是，我经常在开头看见，我看见人们说：“我觉得A, B, C，所以我认为C, D, E, F. ”什么的。
Well, what is your thesis?
好吧，你们的论点是什么？
Is it the first one or the second one? Right?
是第一个还是第二个？
Usually it will be a bit clear what you're trying to say, but the fact that you say two opinions makes your thesis weak,
通常你们要表达的内容会有一点明了，但你们讲了两个观点的事实会减弱你们的论点，
because I'm not sure, you're not taking a very firm stance.
因为我不确定你们采取的立场是否非常坚定。
If you think A, B, C, which is why you believe D, E, F, well, you only think A, B, C, which is not a very strong support for D, E, F or believing D, E, F.
如果你们觉得A, B, C，所以认为D, E, F，那你们认为的只有A, B, C，而这对D, E, F或认为D, E, F并没有很强的支持。
Have one firm expression: "I think" something, done.
写一个坚定的表达：我觉得什么什么，结束。
Support it the rest of the essay, in the conclusion, you can restate that opinion,
文章剩下的部分都用来支持这一观点，你们可以在结尾重述一遍这个观点，
but you don't have to say: "That is why I think", "In conclusion, I think this because that", no.
但你们不必说："That is why I think", "In conclusion, I think this because that"，不要这么说。
"In conclusion, parents make the best teachers for several reasons, including knowledge of their child and..."
"In conclusion, parents make the best teachers for several reasons, including knowledge of their child and..."（综上所述，家长是最好的老师，原因包括对他们孩子的了解......）
whatever your second body paragraph was, I don't know, everybody has different ideas.
以及你们第二个正文段落的内容，每个人都有不同的想法。
One time in the whole essay, that's it.
整篇作文只说一次就够了，不要再重复。
So, these are the five common mistakes people make, try to avoid them, your score will go up right away, I can promise you that.
这些是人们会犯的五个最常见的错误，尽量避免它们你们的成绩就会立马上升，这一点我可以跟你们保证。
If you have any questions, come to www.engvid.com, you can ask me questions in the forum, I will put a quiz to make sure you understand the key concepts, here.
如果有任何问题，请登陆engvid.com，你们可以在论坛里问我问题，我会在那儿上传一个小测验确保你们弄懂了关键概念。
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如果需要额外帮助，请登陆我的网站www.writetotop.com，我在那儿也有很多对写作有用的小技巧。
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