Hi. Welcome again to engvid.com. I'm Adam.
大家好，欢迎再次来到engvid.com，我是Adam。
Today's lesson, we're looking at IELTS and TOEFL, the writing section,
在今天的课上，我们要来看看雅思和托福考试的写作部分，
and we're going to look at the five most common mistakes that I see when I'm checking students' essays. Okay?
我们要来讲一讲我在检查学生的作文时发现的五个最常见的错误。
Now, as usual, for the IELTS and TOEFL lesson, I will speak a little bit more natural speed, a little bit faster than usual.
和往常一样，讲雅思和托福课程时，我会用更自然一些的语速说话，会比平时稍快一些。
If you're a beginner, don't worry, watch the video, listen, practice your listening.
如果你是新手也不要担心，好好看视频，用心听，练习一下你的听力。
Get the vocabulary you need, it's all... it's good for everybody, but just a little bit harder. Okay?
学一下你需要的词汇，这......这对每个人都有好处，不过只是稍微有点难度。
So, now, where do I begin? I check a lot of essays. Okay?
那么，我要从哪儿开始讲呢？我检查很多作文。
People send me their essays, I check them, I edit them, I tell them what they're doing wrong,
人们会把他们的作文发给我，我检查、校订它们，告诉这些人他们哪里写错了，
and I've come to the realization that there are certain mistakes that many, many people make.
然后我意识到，有一些错误是很多很多人都会犯的。
So, I want to tell you five of these common mistakes so that you can avoid making them. Okay?
所以，我想告诉你们这些常见错误中的五个，这样你们就能避免犯这些错误了。
And the first one, and this is the most common mistake that I see is that you are trying too hard.
第一个，这是我最常看见的错误，那就是：用力过猛。
Now, what does this mean?
什么意思呢？
Trying hard is a good thing, right? Yes, it is.
用力是一件好事，对吗？是的，没错。
But you're trying too hard to sound impressive. Okay?
但是你们用力过猛反而无法给人留下深刻印象，知道吗？
You're trying to impress the graders of these... of these exams, IELTS and TOEFL, you think that by using big words or lots of idioms,
你们想惊艳这些考试......雅思和托福考试的阅卷人，你们以为使用大词或很多习语，
or very, very long sentences that are very complex and have many clauses that you're getting a higher score.
或者非常复杂的和有很多从句的长句就能得到高分。
In fact, most of the times, you're actually hurting yourselves.
事实上，在大部分情况下，你们实际上在害自己。
Why? Because you're using words incorrectly, you're using them inappropriately,
为什么？因为你们没有正确使用这些单词，你们的用法不恰当，
meaning in the wrong context or the wrong usage or in the wrong parts of speech, you're using a verb when you should use a noun, etc.
也就是说你们把这些单词用在了错误的上下文中，或者用法有误，或者用在了演讲稿中错误的部分，你们在应该使用一个名词的地方使用了动词，等等。
When you write very, very long sentences, quite often, you have run-on sentences,
通常，当你们写非常非常长的句子时，你们写的都是流水句，
mean... meaning you have two independent clauses in one sentence, and no punctuation, and no conjunctions, and then the whole sentence falls apart and means nothing.
就是说你们在一个句子里写了两个独立的分句，没有标点符号，也没有连接词，那么这整个句子就会瓦解，没有任何意义。