Okay, you had your introduction, we're talking about parents, we're talking about education, we're talking about children.
Some people believe that parents are the best, some people believe teachers are the best.
I think that... I agree that parents are the best teachers, okay, your introduction's done.
Let's get into the first body paragraph, so, first, I'm going to read this to you.
This is not a complete paragraph, but you'll get the idea.
"Firstly, parents know their child best, including what he likes and doesn't like, such as books he likes to read, or favorite science topics.
Parents can also talk to the child's teachers and find out from them how to help him at home.
They can also monitor how much TV he watches, and cutting down on this might help his concentration..." and on and on. Okay?
I didn't give you the full paragraph, not necessary, you'll understand what I'm getting at.
So, common mistake number two: No topic sentence.
If you look at this example, I don't know what this paragraph is about. Right?
A topic sentence is your introduction sentence to the paragraph.
It's very important to remember that one paragraph has one central idea. Okay?
This central idea must be presented right at the beginning of the paragraph so the reader knows what to expect.
So, in this sentence, we're talking about parents know their child, they know what he likes and what he doesn't like,
they know what books he likes, they know what science topics he likes.
What is this paragraph about, is it about books, is it about choosing his books or choosing his science topics,
is it about parents know their child, is it about what he likes, what he doesn't like?
I'm assuming that it's: Parents know their child best, okay, so it's about the parents' knowledge of the child, that is what this paragraph is about.
That is why they are the best teachers, because they know their child.
Put a period here, and then start with your reasons, this is your topic sentence.
This is what the paragraph is about, stop, start giving me your support, start elaborating on this key point, and giving me the details, reasons, examples, etc.