[2013年高考英语福建卷书面表达试卷原题]

[2013年高考英语福建卷书面表达写作指导]
这是一篇典型的漫画作文，具有较高的开放性。但与纯开放的漫画作文相比，2013年高考英语福建卷的书面表达从立意难度上明显有所下降。因为在题目的介绍中已经将漫画揭示的社会现象—“父母包揽一切、孩子过度依赖”—表述的非常清楚，所以考生只要根据漫画作文的写作方法分成三个主体部分（漫画内容、所揭示的现象、个人观点）进行写作即可。
本文中可能要使用的的词汇和短语有：bend forward（向前弯腰）；roll out（铺开）；splendidly dressed（穿着华丽的）；a common phenomenon（一个常见的现象）；the single child in a family（独生子女）；the focus of the family（家庭的中心）；terribly spoiled（严重宠坏）；be reliant on（对...依赖）；overprotection（过分依赖）；do harm to（有坏处），the art of education（教育的艺术）等等。

[2013年高考英语福建卷书面表达满分作文展示]
From the picture we can see a family of three walking on a long red carpet. The son, splendidly dressed (高级句式，过去分词作后置定语), waves proudly in the middle while (高级词汇，并列连词，表对比) the father behind bends forward to hold the jacket and the mother in front rolls out the carpet, sweating (高级词汇，分词作伴随状语).
It shows a common phenomenon nowadays that children are the focus of families (高级句式，主从复合句), shouldering the hope of their parents (高级句式，现在分词作状语). Parents arrange everything for their children and spare no effort to pave the way for (高级词汇) their success. As a consequence (衔接紧密), children become so reliant on (高级短语) their parents that they have no independent thought or creative ideas (高级句式，so...that引导结果状语从句).
Such (高级词汇) a situation is of great concern (高级句型). In my opinion, overprotection and too much care do severe harm to (短语使用恰当) children's development. Instead of doing everything for them (衔接紧密), parents should encourage their children to overcome difficulties and inspire (encourage和 inspire使用得当) them to develop by themselves. Only in this way can they grow up to be independent and become truly successful (高级句式，倒装句).

[2013年高考英语福建卷书面表达失分作文分析]
From the picture we can see a family of three walk（补语使用错误，应该用walking) on a long red carpet. The son who is the center of the picture, walks proudly (句式不完整，应为walks proudly forward). His father bends forward to help him draw his jacket while his mother, who is in front, is rolling out the carpet, with sweat dropping down.The picture showed (动词时态错误，应用一般现在时) that children are the center of each family of each family. As it's said (句式错误，as引导定语从句时用作关系代词，在此处作从句的主语，it应去掉), they are the hope of the whole family. Parents arrange everything for them, even their future. As a result, children rely on their parents and have no independent thoughts. I think this is a serious problem to our society. This would destroy the future generation. For a long run, our China will be in danger.

注：一段式作文是高考英语书面表达中的大忌之一，因为阅卷老师几乎没有时间去逐层剖析考生写作的层次，所以段落的划分就显得非常重要了。特别对于这样的漫画作文，三个要点的清晰呈现是得到高分的一个必要条件。学习者还可以参考2013年江苏高考英语书面表达点评，进一步学习漫画作文的写作技巧。