2015年5月16日雅思写作解析及语料库
　　Some people think students should be encouraged to evaluate and criticize their teachers in order to improve the quality of education while others say this will lead to loss of respect for teachers. Discuss both sides and give your opinion? 有人认为学生们应该被鼓励去评价和批评老师以提高教学质量，有人认为这会导致对于老师的不尊敬，讨论两种观点，给出你的意见?
　　雅思题库：
　　Some people think that in order to improve the quality of education, schools should encourage students to evaluate and criticize their teachers. Other people, however, feel that will result in a loss of respect and discipline in the classroom. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion. 有人认为为了提高教育质量，学生们应该被鼓励去评价和批评老师，有人认为这会导致对于老师的不尊敬和课堂的无序，讨论两种观点，给出你的意见?
　　点评：两种观点讨论，考察教育方式。经典题目，原题重现。
　　作家立场：学生评价老师是一场教育的革命，利大于弊。
　　思路拓展：
　　支持学生评价老师的理由：
　　1. 学生反馈是对老师的教学评估，是检验教学的重要标准。学生评价老师使教育者可以及时地了解学生的需求，进而及时地调整和改善教学方法。同时，学生的鼓励可激发老师的教学热情，可以想象，学生的点赞会激励老师们专业上更加优秀。
　　2. 从学生成长角度而言，鼓励学生评价老师也有利好。换言之，这可以培养成学生们的批判思维，鼓励学生们的独立表达。
　　3. 对于校方面而言，周期性地鼓励学生评估老师的教学可以淘汰那些不思进取，不受欢迎的教育者。老师们有了危机意识，才会不断地精进教学。
　　反对学习评价老师的理由：
　　1. 学生没有成熟到可以对老师和他们的教学作出理性的判断的程度。同时，有些学生可能会因为曾经被老师批评过对老师做出不负责任的评价。
　　2. 鼓励学生评价老师，学生们可能会变得傲慢自大和目无尊长。
　　原创语料库：
　　原创语料库之学生评价老师基础语料库：
　　1. teachers = educators= instructors n老师
　　2. students = learners n学生
　　3. evaluate and criticize teachers v评价和批评老师
　　4. inspire sb to do sth = motivate sb to do sth = encourage sb to do sth v 鼓励某人做 ……
　　5. comment on sth = make comment on v对……做出评论
　　6. make judgment on …… v 对于…… 做出判断
　　7. the academic performance of educators n教育者的学术表现
　　8. the evaluation of the performance of teachers n对于老师的教学评估
　　9. timely feedback from students n来自学生们的及时反馈
　　10. make evaluation on teachers’ performance periodically v 周期性地对于老师的教学做出评估
　　原创语料库之学生评价老师：
　　1. Students ought to be encouraged to evaluate their teachers’ performance. 我们应该鼓励学生评价老师的教学表现。
　　2. Traditionally, to respect educators and value education， as for students， is considered as a kind of virtue, however, many educationalists now encourage learners to evaluate and criticize their teachers. 传统上，尊师重教被当做学生的一种美德，但是，现在很多教育家鼓励学生们评价和批评老师。
　　3. Evaluation of educators by students, whatever its merits and demerits, would amount to a progress in educational practice. 学生评价老师的教学，无论利弊，都是教育实践的进步。
　　解析：amount to = equal to v等同于……
　　4. Evaluation from students deserves more praises. 来自学生的评价更加值得赞美。
　　5. It will have a positive impact on enhancing the quality of teaching by eliminating those incompetent or unpopular teachers. 这可以淘汰不合格以及不受欢迎的老师，因此，有利于教学的改善。
　　解析：incompetent adj 没有能力的
　　6. The encouragement from students will greatly spur teachers’ passion of teaching. Hence, the desire to gain more praises from students could greatly stimulate teachers’ motivation to excel professionally. 学生的鼓励激发老师的教学热情，因此，获得学生的点赞激励老师专业上更加优秀。
　　解析：spur v鞭策
　　解析：to excel professionally v专业上更加优秀
　　7. It is easy for teachers to timely receive students’ feedback so that they could adjust and optimize their teaching methods. 老师们可以及时地获得学生的反馈，因此，他们可以及时地调整和改善教学方法。
　　解析：teaching methods = teaching methodologies n教学方法
　　解析：better = perfect = optimize v完善
　　8. Hence，timely feedback from students is beneficial to the perfection of education and the harmonious relationship of two parties. 因此，来自学生们的及时反馈有助于教学的完善以及师生关系的和谐。
　　9. Teachers are in the best position to evaluate the performance of their colleagues. 最好由老师来评价他们同事的教学表现。
　　10. Encouraging comments from students can give a boost to educators’ performance. 学生们令人鼓舞的评价可帮助教育者表现优异。

　　11. Teachers can make active adjustment of their teaching.老师们可以对于教学做出积极的调整。
　　12. Evaluation from students can， in a larger extent， contribute to the mutual understanding between teachers and students. 在更大程度上, 来自学生的评估可以有助于师生之间的互相理解。
　　13. I am not willing to deny the benefits brought about by co-workers’ remarks on teachers’ performance. 我不想否认由同事评价老师带来的利好。
　　14. Teachers might provide more professional suggestions on how to better the quality of education，after all，most teachers have accumulated a pool of teaching experiences and thus clearly know how to effectively establish a harmonious teacher-student relationship. 老师们也许会对于如何提高教学提出更加专业的建议，毕竟，大多数老师积累了丰富的教学经验也了解如何去和学生们建立和谐的师生关系。
　　15. For example，an experienced teacher can help green hand to manage their class activities effectively.例如，一个经验丰富的老师可以帮助新教师学习如何有效地管理课堂。
　　16. Some problems，however，might inevitably ensue. Some teachers may give negative comments on their co-workers simply because they have career competition with them. 然而，有些问题不可避免，有些老师可能会因为事业方面的竞争对同事做出负面的评价。
　　解析：Some problems，however，might inevitably ensue 一些问题不可避免地发生
　　17. Students should be allowed and encouraged to make comments on their teachers’ performance我们应该允许和鼓励学生们对于老师的教学做出评估。
　　18. It can perfect the quality of education and pave a new way for achieving equality between teachers and students. 这可以提高教学质量，同时，为实现师生的平等开辟了一条新的道路。
　　原创范文赏析：
　　首段：背景介绍 + 争议焦点 + 作家立场
　　Traditionally, to respect educators and value education is considered as a kind of virtue of the students, however, many educationalists currently encourage learners to evaluate and criticize their teachers. This essay aims to prove that students should be allowed and motivated to comment on their teachers’ performance.
　　二段： 正方观点展开：支持学生评价老师的理由
　　Indeed, it is commendable for students to make comments on their teachers’ performance. Firstly, it will exert a beneficial influence on enhancing the quality of teaching by eliminating those less competent and less popular teachers. Meanwhile, the encouragement from students will greatly conduce to teachers’ passion. Hence, the desire to gain the praise of students could stimulate teachers’ motivation to excel professionally. Secondly, it is easy for teachers to timely receive students’ feedback so that they could adjust and optimize their teaching methods. Lastly, it can perfect the quality of education and pave a new way for achieving equality between teachers and students.
　　解析：excel professionally v教学上变得更加精通
　　解析：optimize their teaching method v改善他们的教学方法
　　三段：反方观点展开：反对学生评价老师的理由
　　Although the practice of evaluation of teachers is embraced by many people, still others remain suspicious of it merits. First, students may be not mature enough to make sound judgment upon their teachers’ academic performance. Conversely, some negative comments might be randomly made only because teachers’ hairstyle, appearance or clothes are not their favorite. Further, some students are more likely to make irresponsible comments on their teachers simply because they are blamed by their teachers, therefore, teachers will be hurt innocently. Eventually, youngsters may become more disrespectful and arrogant if they are encouraged to criticize and evaluate their teachers.
　　解析：make sound judgment upon sth 对于……做出理性判断
　　解析：may become more disrespectful and arrogant 也许会变得目无尊长和傲慢自大
　　尾段：再次亮明观点 + (总结理由)
　　In closing， evaluation of the teachers by high school students, whatever its merits and demerits would amount to a revolution in educational practice. However, the merits of this practice outweigh its downsides.
　　解析：amount to a revolution in educational practice v等同于教育的革命
　　解析：the merits of this practice outweigh its downsides 这种做法的利大于弊
　　点评：
　　本文主题明确;逻辑清晰;淡化模板;个性开篇;惜墨如金;词汇多变;句法精彩。符合雅思写作四项评分标准，是至少7.5分以上的原创范文，可为童鞋赏析仿写之佳作。建议童鞋背诵文中精彩的词汇和句法。范文只是雅思写作之一种，文无定法，建议童鞋独立思考，勤奋练笔，打造个性化原创范文。