2014年12月6日雅思写作解析及语料库(新东方版)
日期:2014-12-09 19:03

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  2014年12月6日雅思写作解析及语料库
  Some people think that "vertical City" is the best, where people live and work in tall buildings. Others think that "horizontal" City is better, where there are few tall buildings. Discuss both views and give your opinion. 有人认为垂直城市是最好的选择,人们可以生活工作在高层建筑,有人认为水平城市是更好的选择,因为没有太多高层建筑,讨论两种观点,给出你的意见。
  原创范文赏析:
  首段:背景介绍 + 争议焦点 + 作家立场
  Such is human to settle down in one’s favorite city. The construction style of diverse cities might satisfy different tastes of people. Perhaps no issue has led to such an endless debate as to whether or not residing in a city with tall buildings outshines living in the counterpart with small houses. This essay aims to prove that compared with the life in small buildings, to live and work in larger skyscrapers enjoys more visible merits
  解析:
  1. outshine v胜过
  2. counterpart n 相对于的人或者物
  3. perhaps no issue has led to such an endless debate as to whether or not …… 也许没有什么像是否……一样引起人们的争议
  4. reside in sp = live in sp = dwell in sp v居住于某地
  5. enjoys more visible merits v ……的优势明显
  二段:正方观点的展开
  As an advocate of living in vertical city, my justifications are not far to seek. The most obvious advantage of living and working in tall buildings is that people’s health can be better ensured. In other words,residents or workers could, to some extent, stay away from the agonies brought about by city noise or air contamination. Another merit coming from undertaking a job or inhabiting in vertical city is that people might have a merry mood. By that I mean, the employees can feast their eyes on the city landscape from those tall buildings when they need to have a relaxation. Meanwhile, residents can enjoy plenty of sunshine if they live in lofty constructions. To make the final point, as far as the city development is concerned, tall buildings will have a major part to play in reducing the pressure of housing shortage and meeting the requirement of population explosion. After all, those small buildings never fail to occupy the precious and limited land resources
  解析:
  1. stay away from the agonies brought about by …… v远离由……带来的苦恼
  2. live in lofty constructions v居住于高层建筑
  3. In other words = by that I mean v换言之
  4. never fail to occupy the precious and limited land resources v一直占用宝贵的有限的土地资源
  5. feast their eyes on the city landscape v尽情欣赏城市的景色
  三段:反方观点:
  Some people, however, might take a skeptical attitude towards my stand. Some people might argue that horizontal city is a superior option for both city’s future and individual well-being. Another argument might be supported by some people is that tall buildings are not universally suitable for all cities, especially for those underdeveloped towns because tall buildings fail to synchronize with the proportion of population and the financial budget of the local government. Still, I have to concede that small constructions are never without their merits. As for the old, living in skyscrapers might create real inconvenience for them. At the same time, working in high buildings sometimes makes it hard to escape if some uncertainties, for example, earthquake or fire occurs.
  解析:
  1. take a skeptical attitude towards my stand v对于我的立场持有怀疑的意见
  2. is a superior option v是更好的选择
  3. are not universally suitable for v不是普遍适合……
  4. fail to synchronize with the proportion of population and the financial budget of local government v未能和城市人口比例以及地方政府的财政预算保持一致
  5. might create real inconvenience for v给……造成真正的不便
  6. some uncertainties n一些不确定的事情
  尾段:
  My stand is that developing vertical city is a better choice for a city’s development in the long term. If people are asked to make a choice, I believe the vast majority of them will have a liking for working and living in tall constructions.
  解析:
  1. buildings = constructions n建筑物;建筑
  2. have a liking for = have a preference for v喜欢……
  3. the vast majority of them n他们中的大多数人
  创作感言:
  12月6日雅思写作为新题出现,思路拓展略有难度。本题写作和保护古老建筑无关(虽然预测热题中包含是否应该拆除古老建筑),很多网络“名师”再次宣传各种压中题目,暗笑无语。我预测题目及分享语料库的本意是帮助童鞋全面备考,拓展思路,提升实力。
  写作凭借的是点滴积累的头脑风暴和驾驭语言的能力,而非侥幸压中原题。高分作文的关键无非是思路加语言。精彩表达可使文章在思想不变的情况下与众不同,本文写作比较炫技,刻意使用一些亮点表达,(因为题目的思路拓展较难)。
  我为新东方雅思频道的原创范文写作已经坚持8个月,这种惯性来之不易,无论新题出现还是旧题改写,尽力写到完美,在此过程中,精进写作才华,树立强硬自信。和人的较量是简单的,和时间的较量才是最难的。烤鸭之路很艰辛,但是我们要有坚信,在你圆梦的路上伴你一路前行。
  Tip:12月雅思写作最后两场预测近期发布,请关注雅思频道。

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