(单词翻译:单击)
点评:2014年6月7日终于考察了久违的犯罪类话题,考察的是2004年经典旧题警察是否应该配枪上街,只是转换了提问角度。属于意料之外,情理之中。犯罪类话题最经典的题目应该是累积犯罪的原因和解决;青少年犯罪的原因和解决;青少年犯罪的原因和惩罚措施。边缘题目包括:是否应该对于传媒中的暴力和犯罪细节加以限制;警察是否应该配枪上街;女性工作无法照顾孩子,是否导致青少年犯罪。还可能涉及到的考题包括校园暴力和女性犯罪。我预测的累积犯罪的原因和解决策略是所有题目中最核心的母题,思路拓展中的加大对于累积犯罪者的处罚力度,对于潜在的犯罪分子具有威慑作用;重刑犯诅咒和憎恨他们认为的不公平的社会,做出反社会行为等精彩语料库可以用在6月7日的雅思考试中,帮助考生博取高分。
2014年6月7日雅思写作小作文回忆:静态柱形图:发达国家三年里对发展中国家的援助。
2014年6月7日雅思写作回忆山寨版:(这是2004的题目)
Unlike other countries, police in UK do not carry guns. Some think it leaves citizen unprotected. Others think it reduces the overall violence in UK society. Discuss both views and give your own opinion?
点评:上面的是错误的回忆,仅仅是某“名师”为了第一时间增加点击的不负责任的网络收集而已。
2014年6月7日雅思考试写作回忆精准版(来着薛鹏老师长春考生现场回忆)
Some people believe that if a police force carries guns, this encourages higher levels of violence in that society; to what extent do you agree or disagree? 有人认为警察配枪激发社会中更多暴力行为,是否认同?
点评:该题目和我预测的题目思路拓展和语料库很多可以融会贯通。
犯罪类:(一类重点)
Research suggests that majority of criminals who send to prison would commit crimes when set free what do you think of this case? What can be done to solve this problem? 累积犯罪的原因和解决策略?
思路拓展:犯罪类话题很久没有考察,为准备重点,除了累积犯罪,少年犯罪的原因和解决考察的机会也很大。累积犯罪的解决建议:对于惯犯和重刑犯加大处罚力度;对于少年犯罪,过失犯罪提供教育机会;对于缺乏谋生技能者提供工作培训的机会 (理想化写作)。
犯罪类:
1. Research suggests that majority of criminals who send to prison would commit crimes when set free, what do you think of this case? What can be done to solve this problem? 持续犯罪的原因以及解决途径?(犯罪类已经遗漏很久了)
思路拓展:第一,对于少年犯罪;初次犯罪;过失犯罪,教育是推荐的方法,可以帮助犯罪分子明辨是非;加强守法意识。第二,有些犯罪分子渴望再次开始新的生活,但是心有余力不足,工作培训是推荐的方法,这可以提高他们的谋生技能。第三,加大处罚力度不是没有理由,尤其是对于累积犯罪者以及惯犯;这可以威慑犯罪分子;体现法律公正;对于被害者家属也是精神安慰。
首段:背景介绍 + 争议焦点 + 作家立场
Alarmingly, the rate of manifold perpetrations keeps on soaring, which not only afflicts the sufferers but also jeopardizes the security of the community. Therefore, it is not rare to see that many police officers carry gun when fulfilling the tasks. People have been debating whether or not policeman is supposed to carry guns to patrol the street. Personally, it is preferable and viable to allow the guard of the people to carry guns although some potential problems should be stressed.
翻译:令人担忧的是,各类犯罪不断上升,不仅仅使受害者痛苦,也威胁到社会的安定。因此,警察在执行任务的时候配枪十分常见。人们一直在在争议警察在上街巡逻的时候是否应该配枪。我认为,人民卫士配枪上街是可取可行的,经管其弊端应该被强调。
点评:文风有朴素之美,也有华丽之美,小鹏哥范文写作即为才艺展示。文章首句即为亮剑,用到很多8级词汇,接下来的文风保持一致,该范文适合赏析,不适合考生仿写。
词汇点评:(将阅读词汇运用为积极的写作词汇)
manifold adj 多种形式的;
soar v 激增;
afflicts v 使痛苦;
jeopardize v 危害到……
guard of the people 人民卫士
二段:让步段:警察配枪上街的潜在弊端(二点让步)
Granted, permitting the police officer to take guns might, to some extent, arouse some felons’ impulse of conducting some anti-social offences, especially for those hardened violators. More precisely, some gangsters never fail to curse and resent the society which they think unfair. The impulse of taking revenge on the society might be stimulated when they see all the cops are equipped with guns. Also, without a strict legislation of the possible abuse of gun, weapons might hurt the man in the street accidently.
翻译:的确,准许警官配枪某种程度上可能诱发重刑犯的犯罪冲动,他们容易做出反社会行为,尤其对于一些惯犯而言。具体来说,很多帮派分子历来诅咒和憎恨他们认为不公平的社会,警官配枪上街可能刺激他们报复社会的冲动。另外,缺乏对可能的枪支滥用的立法规范,武器的使用可能意外伤及大众百姓。
点评:雅思写作中考官不喜欢看到太多的套语,认为这是背诵和抄袭的能力,因此,小鹏哥行文淡化路标词汇。
词汇点评:
to some extent adv 某种程度上,插入语的使用让文章显得活泼。
conducting some anti-social offences v 做出反社会行为(犯罪的升级写法);我不相信考官会喜欢 break the law 或者 commit crime 这样的白开水表达。
taking revenge on ……报复 …… (6级词汇)
the man in the street n 百姓(来着1998年朱镕基总理的政府工作报告英文版)
三段:反驳段:警察配枪的利好(三点展开)
Nevertheless, the merits of encouraging policemen to carry gun when they are on duty far outweigh its possible downsides. First, it will have a deterrent role to play in preventing and stopping potential violators from recommitting new crimes. In other words, many malefactors may look before they leap when seeing all the policemen are equipped with guns. Also, guns are, indeed, reliable helpers of the police officers. When the police force encounter some unexpected emergency, it is the gun that rescue them from harm. Last, during the organized riot, police officers with guns could effectively put an end to the chaos so that the public security can be ensured and a more stable society can be maintained.
翻译:然而,鼓励警察配枪执行任务利大于弊。第一,这可以预防或者阻止潜在的犯罪行为。换言之,当看到警官们全副武装的时候,很多潜在的犯罪分子会三思后行。第二,枪支的确是警官们的好助手,当警官们遇到意外的紧急情况时,枪支可以保护他们。第三,在有组织的暴乱期间,全副武装的警官可以有效地终结混乱,因此,公众安全得以保障,社会稳定得以维持。
点评:反驳段要三点反驳。雅思写作的思路拓展一定要平时积累,我喜欢看今日说法或者天网栏目。我有每日阅读新浪和凤凰的习惯。打击犯罪的话题是在中国新疆反恐;重庆打黑;个别警官滥用枪支等大背景下考察的,这也是紧扣时代脉搏。
词汇点评: so that 引导结果从句;can be ensured 使用被动表达,是否有些雅思阅读的感觉。
尾段:再次亮明观点
Overall, my stand is that in order to perfectly fulfill the obligation of protecting citizens, it is of great necessity for the police force to carry guns.
翻译:我方立场是:为了完美地履行保护公民的责任,警察配枪十分必要。
原创雅思写作经典语料库(推荐背诵)
1. courage policemen to carry gun with them when they are on duty v 鼓励警察在他们执行任务的时候配枪
点评:题目信息改写;一定可用。
2. Guns are, to some extent, reliable helpers of the police officers 枪支在某种程度上是警察们的助手。
点评:to some extent 插入语。
3. When the police officer encounter some unexpected emergency, it is the gun that protect / rescue them from harm. 在警察遇到紧急情况的时候, 枪支保护安全。
点评:it is …… that 强调句型。
4. Look before you leap 三思后行(经典谚语)
点评:本句用在本文中凝练地论证作家论据。
5. exert a deterrent effect on sb v 对于……施加威慑的作用(写作亮点)
点评: have a harmful impact on …… = have negative consequences for ……有不良的影响;(拓展表达)。
6. …… may arouse some felons’ impulse of conducting some anti-social offences v 诱发犯罪分子做出反社会行为的冲动。
点评:conducting some anti-social offences v 做出反社会行为(最精彩的表达;犯罪话题推荐使用);felon 重罪人。
7. police officer = policeman = cop n 警察
点评:三剑客词汇替换;体现用词的丰富性,cop 为口语词汇;写作也可使用。
8. armed with pistols v 配枪
点评:pistols n 手枪(亮点表达;具体词汇)
9. patrols the street v 上街巡逻(推荐使用)
10. armed with guns = carry a gun = be equipped with guns v 配枪(三剑客写法;写作基本功)
11. In order to perfectly fulfill the tasks of protecting citizens, it is of great necessity for the cop to carry gun 保护人民的安全,警察可以在执行任务的时候配枪(作家观点)。
点评:task n 任务(用词精准,含有艰巨性的任务)
12. police are on duty v 警察在执行任务的时候
13. compel the perpetrators to surrender v 迫使违法者投降
点评:该短语论证警察配枪对于潜在犯罪分子的威慑作用。
14. alarmingly adv 令人担忧的是……
点评:写作中副词和动词才能准确体现作家文采;该词推荐用在社会类话题的首段首句。
15. effectively put an end to the chaos v 有效地结束混乱
点评:该短语强调配枪在解决暴乱时候的作用。
16. during the riot v 在暴乱期间
点评:riot n 暴乱 经典小词;写作亮点。
17. to ensure the public security = stabilize the community v 稳定社会
18. …… will create a more stable and harmonious society v 创造更加和谐稳定的社会
点评:万能理由,还可以支持政府为教育,医疗买单等。
19. ……might curse and resent the society which they think unfair ……也许会 诅咒和憎恨他们认为的不公平的社会。(小鹏哥经典语料库;强化写作中的万能理由)。
点评:万能理由:可以写作大学生择业难的影响;青少年犯罪的原因;累计犯罪的原因等。
20. conduct some anti-social offences = embark on the criminal road = turn to a life a crime v 走上犯罪的道路:
点评: 犯罪类话题三剑客经典表达。