托福写作:对"With the development of society"说不
日期:2012-05-17 14:49

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作为托福独立写作开头的经典, "With the development of society"或者"With the development of science and technology"备受广大烤鸭的热捧。可想而知,ETS官方阅卷老师千百次看过这个烤鸡们津津乐道的所谓"万能开头句"和"万金油",他们的身心将会受到何等的摧残!我们得到的可怜分数也就不足为奇了。不仅如此,很多考生使用这个开头方式生搬硬套。请看下面学生的习作:
  With the improvement of society, more and more people miss the life of country, and think city's life is filled with stress and material temptation. 社会发展了进步了,人们一定怀念乡村生活吗?
  再看:
  With the development of science and technology, the access of advertisement has been increasingly varied. 科技发展和广告的发展有必然和直接的关系吗?
  上面两位同学显然生硬地把社会或者科技的发展和文章主题强扭在一起。
  怎么避免类似的问题?答案是另辟蹊径。
  题目:Do you prefer to live in a small town or a big city? 看下面这位同学的开头段。
  In English, there is a well-known fairy story about a poor country boy, Dick Whittington, who goes to London because he believes that the streets of that city are "paved with gold." The story is a tale of "from rags to riches." Dick eventually becomes the Lord Mayor of London. Like the hero of that story, I always find wonder and adventure in cities.
  开头一改陈旧老套的模式,以故事拉开序幕,让人耳目一新,非常自然流畅引人话题。
  当然,类似的开头方式并非绝对不可取。先看例子:
  With the scientific development, people nowadays are able to know more about the world than the people in the past are. 这个句子存在的问题是科技的发展和人们了解世界之间的关系并不明确。修改的方法是:With the enormous development in the field of communications technology, people nowadays are able to know more about the world than the people in the past were. 这样两者的关系就明确了。
  文章开头段有两个作用:引出话题和明确立场。好的开头不仅仅实现这两个功能,还能抓住读者的注意和进一步阅读的欲望。所以,我们应从这三个方面考虑开头段的写法。

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重点单词
  • stressn. 紧张,压力 v. 强调,着重 vt. 强调 n.
  • variedadj. 各种各样的 动词vary的过去式和过去分词
  • eventuallyadv. 终于,最后
  • temptationn. 诱惑,引诱
  • improvementn. 改进,改善
  • enormousadj. 巨大的,庞大的
  • adventuren. 冒险,奇遇 vt. 冒险,尝试 vi. 大胆进行,