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第一次世界大战World War I
Jesse D. Examples of plans gone awry can also be seen through history. At the beginning of WWI, the German army developed a plan that they thought to be smart, quick and effective. The Schlieffen plan, which was formulated by German General Alfred Von Schlieffen, proposed knocking out France first with a lightening attack through neutral Belgium before turning on Russia. The plan, which seemed foolproof, failed as the Germans faced a surprise when the Belgians defended their homeland. This slowed the Germans down and lead to their loss against the French--and the eventual loss of the war.
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这个段落十分注意事实的详细描述，句子结构也很漂亮："The Schlieffen plan,which was formulated by German general Alfred Von Schlieffen, proposed knocking out France first with a lightening attack through neutral Belgium before turning on Russia.”