2015年4月30日雅思写作解析及语料库(新东方版)
日期:2015-05-04 18:44

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  2015年4月30日雅思写作解析及语料库
  In some countries, more adults choose to continue to live with their parents even after they graduate and have found jobs. Do the advantage of this trend outweigh the disadvantages? 在一些国家,很多年轻人选择和父母生活在一起,即使已经毕业,找到了工作,你是否认为这种做法的利大于弊。
  雅思题库类似题目:
  2014年9月27日雅思写作回忆:
  Recently years,more and more people choose to live by themselves,why? Is it positive or negative for the development of the society? 近年来,很多人选择独自生活,原因何在,这对于社会的发展是有利还是有弊?
  利弊讨论话题提问标志:
  1. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages 讨论其利弊.
  2. Do the advantage of this trend outweigh the disadvantages? 是否认为这种趋势的利大于弊.
  雅思布局图:(弊大于利)
  首段:背景介绍 + 争议焦点 + 写作目的
  二段:利好的展开:二点理由: 一定要有细节或者例证支持
  三段:弊端的展开:三点理由: 一定要有细节或者例证支持
  尾段:再次亮明观点 +(总结理由)
  作家立场:年轻人毕业后依然和父母生活在一起是弊大于利。
  雅思思路拓展:
  年轻人和父母同住的利好:
  1. 减轻了年轻人生存的压力,因为职场新人通常薪水较低,和父母同住可以降低生活成本,为年轻人未来的婚姻打下经济基础。
  2. 增强了家庭的纽带,使父母和子女的感情更加和谐和亲密。
  3. 对于奋斗中的年轻人而言,他们的精力应该更多地用于发展事业。和父母同住,他们的生活会更加健康和规律,因为父母会给他们提供生活上无微不至的关照。因此,年轻人可以经精力充沛地应对事业的挑战。
  年轻人和父母同住的弊端:
  1. 和父母同住也许会增加年轻人对于父母的依赖性,不利于锻炼他们的独立性,生存能力和适应能力。例如,年轻人应该学会洗衣服,做饭,危机处理,这些对于他们的成长是有利好的,这些只有独立生活才能更好地被培养。
  解析:论据可以写作出国留学;寄宿学校;
  2. 凡事依赖父母,会给上了年纪父母带来身体上和经济上的压力。如果,父母不必照顾孩子,他们可以旅行或健身,安享晚年。
  3. 两代人之间有代沟,所以,在一起生活不一定就是完全和谐的。有时候,同住可能增加两代人之间的矛盾。
  雅思原创范文赏析:
  首段:背景介绍 + 争议焦点 + 作家立场
  It seems that numerous young adults, especially those university leavers or fresh employees are fond of sharing the same house with their parents rather than renting an apartment. For many years, people have been debating the pros and cons of this phenomenon without reaching any definite consensus. My stand is that living with parents is not recommendatory because the demerits outweigh the possible merits.
  解析:For many years, people have been debating the pros and cons of this phenomenon without reaching any definite consensus 多年来,人们在思考这个现象的利弊,没有达成共识。
  解析: …… is not recommendatory because the demerits outweigh the possible merits. …… 是不推荐的,因为其弊大于利。
  解析:recommend sb to do sth v 推荐某人去做某事
  二段:利好的展开:二点理由;细节支持
  To be sure, some benefits could be gained by living with parents. First of all, young people are more likely to lead a regular and healthy life with sufficient care from their parents. More precisely, most of the adults who live with their parents can be taken good care of, thus, they can brave career challenges energetically. Also, there is a possibility of the decomposition of family bonds if youngsters live far away from their parents for a long time. Conversely, living under the same roof with their parents can strengthen the family tie.
  解析:a possibility of the decomposition of family bonds n 家庭纽带分解的可能
  解析:To be sure, some benefits could be gained by …… 的确,……可以带来一些利好
  解析:…… can brave career challenges energetically v ……可以精力充沛地应对事业的挑战
  解析:brave v勇敢面对……
  拓展:vigorously = energetically adv精力充沛地
  解析:…… can strengthen the family tie v可以增强家庭纽带
  三段:弊端的展开:
  We have no reasons, however, to ignore the downsides triggered by living with parents. The most glaring demerit is that it is facile for young people to decline their independence and viability via living with their parents. More precisely, washing clothes, tidying up rooms and tackling crisis by oneself are the basic abilities one needs for his or her future life. acquiring these skills at earlier age helps those who are in the formative years to face up to challenges later in their lives. Another drawback deriving from living under the same roof with parents is that one might live a parasitic life in parents' home. In marked contrast, those who prefer to live on their own could train their interpersonal skills, money management, adaptability. Finally,the family relationship might become even worse under the subtle influence of the generation gap because parents and children usually have different life concepts and habits.
  解析:adapt (适应)+ ability(能力)= adaptability n 适应能力
  解析: We have no reasons, however, to ignore the downsides triggered by …… 然而,我们没有理由忽视由……引起的弊端
  解析:The most obvious demerit is that …… 最明显的弊端在于……
  解析: Another drawback coming from……is that ……来自……的另外一个弊端在于……
  尾段:再次亮明观点:
  Overall, I re-affirm my conviction that living with parents is a double-edged sword which can be used equally for good or evil, however, youngsters should be encouraged to temper their independence, viability and adaptability. Choosing to face up to the challenges of living independently is one of the best strategies to obtain this objective.
  解析:temper one’s independence v锻炼一个人的独立性
  解析:Overall, I re-affirm my conviction that ……总之,我再次重申我的立场
  解析:…… is a double-edged sword which can be used equally for good or evil …… 是一把双刃刀,有利有弊
  解析:…… is one of the best strategies to obtain this objective. …… 是最好的策略之一来实现这个目标
  解析:obtain this objective v 实现这个目标
  点评:
  本文提问角度为2014年之旧题改写,因此,以雅思写作核心母题勤奋练笔对于提高写作极其重要。原创范文只是雅思写作之一种,文无定法。本文主题明确;逻辑清晰;词汇精准;句法多变;衔接顺畅;细节饱满,首尾呼应;符合写作四项评分标准,可为童鞋赏析和仿写的佳作。建议童鞋自由写作,打造个性范文。

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