2015年3月12日雅思写作解析及语料库(新东方版)
日期:2015-03-16 18:04

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  2015年3月12日雅思写作解析及语料库
  政府类 + 环保类
  Some people think that it is more important to plant more trees in open area which in towns and cities than build more housing. To what extend do agree or disagree?
  作家立场:支持城市在开放地多植树。
  布局图:
  首段:背景介绍 + 争议焦点 + 作家立场
  二段:第一次支持立场
  三段:第二次支持立场
  四段:让步不同意观点的合理性 + 坚持我方立场
  尾段:再次亮明观点
  思路拓展:
  为何保护环境更加重要:
  1. 植树有助于保护环境,这可以为人们提供更加健康的生存空间,因此,可以提高人们的健康指数和幸福感。
  2. 保护环境也有助于实现资源的可持续性发展,同时,吸引更多的投资。例如,大连是一座花园城市,因为绿化和环保的成功,其吸引了更多的旅游投资,环保成为促进经济发展的重要因素之一。南京的梧桐树给人们提提供了一片阴凉和休闲的好去处。
  3. 保护环境有助于为子孙后代营造更加健康的生存环境。
  原创范文赏析:
  首段:背景介绍 + 争议焦点 + 作家立场
  The government, as a decision-maker, is the representative of citizen’s basic interests. In this sense, every governmental policy will inevitably exert a profound influence on the further prosperity of the nation. People differ greatly in their views as to whether or not it is more preferable for the government to put more efforts into planting trees in the open area of a city instead of building more houses. To voice my opinion,city dwellers will benefit more from the improvement of the city environment, although the value of new construction cannot be underestimated.
  点评:首段个性开篇;立场鲜明。
  二段: 第一次支持作家立场
  The first convincing argument why beautifying the city is superior to the establishment of new houses is that a cleaner and healthier city environment can provide city residents with a better living space,which would be conducive to one’s health. For example, in my city, increasing number of trees have been planting per year, thus, many of us can breathe the fresh air and enjoy the closeness to nature, many senior citizens enjoy taking a stroll in a woods around South Lake. Therefore, the multiplication of new plants has greatly decreased the possibility of infecting respiratory diseases.
  点评:植树给人们的健康和休息生活带来的利好。
  三段:第二次支持作家立场
  Here is a good example providing strong support to my stand. Why environmental protection is much more important in comparison with economic development is that eco-friendly policies will benefit a city or a nation in the long run. The issue reminds me of a clean and beautiful city Dalian, which is embraced by a rich variety of green trees or plants. As the former mayor said, Dalian will never develop economy at the cost of hurting the environment. Much to our encouragement, eco-friendly environment attract more business men and enterprises to make huge investment in this eco-friendly city.
  点评:城市植树对于城市发展的利好
  四段:让步不同意观点的合理性
  Indeed,I have to concede that in some metropolitan cities in the world , it is irrational and unfeasible to expect the local governments to give priority to planting trees. By contrast,in order to ease the pressure of housing shortage,proper land resources should be allocated the construction of new infrastructure or commercial buildings. However, I want to rebut that it is more viable for most cities to attach importance to the amelioration of the environment.
  点评:让步原题观点的合理性 + 坚持我方立场
  尾段:再次亮明观点
  In a nutshell, I re-affirm my view that planting more trees is clearly a worthwhile endeavor helping to protect the environment. The role of the government in environmental conservation is challenging yet inescapable. However, as for those densely populated cities, governments of all levels should have their own strategies of developing the cities.
  点评:尾段再次强调我方立场。

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