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2015年1月10日雅思写作解析及语料库
2015年1月10日雅思小作文:柱形图
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2015年1月10日雅思大作文题目:
观点类:
The leaders or directors of organizations are often older people, but some people say that young people can also be a leader, to what extent do you agree or disagree? 企业领袖通常都是年长者,有认为:年轻人更应该做领袖,是否认同?
相关题目:
Some people said that younger people should hold important positions in the governments. Others believe that it is not proper. Discuss both sides and give your opinions? 有人认为年轻人应该在政府中担任要职,有人反对,讨论两方观点,给出你的意见?(2014年7月12日= 2010年7月10日)
2015年1月10日雅思写作题目指令词汇替换:
1. leaders of organizations = those who can fill managerial position n 那些可以做管理岗位者
2. leaders of organizations = top leaders of corporations n 企业领袖
3. older people = senior leaders n 年长的管理者
4. young people = young adults = the young = youngsters n 年轻人
5. can also be a leader = can play the role of business leaders = can also act as the role of management v可以扮演管理者的角色
作家立场:支持年轻人应该在企业中扮演管理者的角色。
布局图:
首段:背景介绍 + 争议焦点 + 作家立场:
二段:第一次支持作家立场以及细节展开
三段:第二次支持作家立场以及细节展开
四段:第三次支持作家立场以及细节展开:
尾段:再次亮明观点 + (总结理由)
头脑风暴导言:
企业的企字,上面为人,下面为止,意为众归则才聚,才聚则企业强。21世纪最贵的人才。企业的竞争归根结底是人才的竞争。管理者对于企业的发展至关重要,领导者的优异程度很大程度上决定着企业的竞争力以及发展潜力。领导力的内涵很多,包含前瞻性,决策力,危机处理能力,创新意识,冒险精神,勇于承担等。年长者做领袖固然有优势,年长者一般是积累了丰富的管理经验,做出决策时考虑周全,熟悉企业员工的优势等。但是,培养青年俊才才是企业强劲发展的基石。年轻人和年长者在做管理方面的区别在于:年轻人有光辉灿烂的前景,而年长者的辉煌即将成为过去。
思路拓展:
1. 年轻人和年长者在做管理方面的区别在于:年轻人有光辉灿烂的前景,而年长者的辉煌即将成为过去。试想,一个企业不给年轻人成长成熟的机会,又如何能变得繁荣和强大。领袖要在战斗中学习战斗(领导者要在领导岗位培养领导力),年轻人可塑性强,善于学习,敢于吃苦,当他们慢慢适应管理职位的时候,就是企业强劲发展之时。
2. 年轻人做企业领袖令人兴奋,他们不追逐名利,也不贪图生活的舒适,很多时候,他们思考的是如何精进才华,创造价值,帮助企业提升竞争优势。同时,他们敏锐的洞察力和新颖的创造力通常会帮助企业抓住商机,实现盈利。例如,宝洁公司的一名年轻高管在制定牙膏销售策略的时候,提出一个将牙膏管口扩大的方法,小小的创意使企业利润增加。
3. 争议使我想起了叔叔保罗的故事:叔叔是自我创业者,24岁就尝试做领袖,创业历经艰辛。他在一次次挫折失败和危机处理中积累了领导经验,他深知年轻人对于企业发展的重要,在他事业稳定后,叔叔很少雇请有经验的年长管理者,形成对比的是,他积极培养年轻的领导者,给他们以鼓励和支持,这是一种高瞻远瞩,年轻高管给叔叔企业的发展注入了新鲜活力。
观点总结:
年长管理者固然有其一定的优势,但是,对于企业而言,培养青年领袖对其长远发展有更加积极的影响。
原创范文赏析:
首段:背景介绍 + 作家立场
When a company selects someone for managerial position, there is often a choice between cultivating youthful employees and using senior leaders. Most youngsters aren’t usually thought of as leaders. However, the young ought to be inspired to assume a leadership role in a company.
二段:第一次支持作家立场及细节展开
Why should young leaders should be regarded as path-breaking workers, there is one striking difference between a senior leader and a young manager: the young has a glorious future before him and the old has a splendid future behind him. How can an enterprise become prosperous and mighty if its younger workers fail to be given the opportunities to grow.Leadership often links to decision-making ability, crisis-solving skills,recognizing opportunities and so on,yet,nobody is born with these talents. Youngsters enjoy a lot of superiorities in acting as leaders. More precisely, they are eager to learn, dare to bear hardships. Hence, a company will prosper when its young leaders become competent at managerial position
三段:第二次支持作家立场及细节展开
Also,encouraging the young to be leaders is exciting, they seldom pursue wealth or fame, they are not crazy about love of comfort. They usually will think how to excel professionally, create more personal value and help the organizations to achieve profitability. Meanwhile, what embodies their merits lies in their creative mode of thinking and agile insight. For example,Proctor-Gamble corporation once adopted an young manger’s innovative marketing strategy. Namely, to enlarge the opening of the toothpaste tube helped the company increase sales
四段:第三次支持作家立场及细节展开
This debate also reminds me of my Uncle, who is now a successful enterpriser. His self-made story begun at the age of 24,imaginably, he tasted many hardships and frustrations,however, he successfully accumulated entrepreneurship in the early stages of his career. Then, he clearly knew the roles that vigorous young men could play in his career. Instead of hiring senior leaders, my Uncle actively fostered youthful managers among internal employees. Much to his relief,young leaders have been injecting fresh vitality into the development of his enterprise
尾段:再次亮明观点
Overall,it is commendable to motivate younger people to undertake some crucial managerial tasks, for they own infinite potentials and will benefit the company in the long run
全文点评:
本篇保持范文创作之个性及高质量。全文惜墨如金(例如首尾段没有出现我认为),衔接简洁,却逻辑清晰,论证饱满。段落间的起承转合,行文中的表达亮点,值得借鉴。原创范文只是雅思写作之一种,希望可以抛砖引玉。
创作感言:
雅思原创范文系列分享有其挑战性和趣味性。开年一定是新题出现,因而,写作充满挑战。但是,尽我所能,完成创作,又是一种小快乐。文本创作不难,难的是写到精彩,又不炫技,让童鞋可以借鉴。语料库拓展推荐牢记于心,即为学术性文体之固定优秀表达。