2014年8月2日雅思写作解析以及原创范文
　　8月2日雅思写作小作文回忆：静态柱形图
　　8月2日雅思写作大作文回忆：In many parts of the world, children and teenagers are committing more crimes, what are the causes? How should these young criminals to be punished. 很多国家，青少年犯罪增加，原因何在，应该如何处罚? (2010年8月5日原题重现)
　　解析： 8月2日小作文考察考频最高的柱形图，微博特别强调。大作文考察青少年犯罪的原因和惩罚措施。8月2日预测了二次犯罪和青少年犯罪，同时，分享了青少年犯罪语料库。8月9日雅思作文只要谈及少年犯罪的根源是商业化大众传媒对于少年人心灵的毒害，惩罚措施就是加大对于传媒的审查力度，加大对于不良传媒的处罚力度，语料融会贯通。
　　犯罪类：
　　Research suggests that majority of criminals who send to prison would commit crimes when set free, what do you think of this case? What can be done to solve this problem?持续犯罪的原因以及解决途径?
　　点评：犯罪类话题经典考题为少年犯罪的原因和解决，是否应该进行传媒审查，累积犯罪的原因和解决，考虑到累积犯罪为较难话题，少年犯罪和传媒审查可以融会贯通，8月预测犯罪类调整为累积犯罪的原因和解决。
　　原创语料库：(融会贯通写作是否应该传媒审查，少年犯罪)
　　1. reform those law-breakers = reclaim those criminals v改造犯罪分子
　　2. juvenile crime = adolescent crime = teenage crime = juvenile delinquency n青少年犯罪
　　3. young offenders = teenage criminals = young law-breakers n 少年犯
　　4. embark on the criminal road v 走上犯罪道路(亮点表达)
　　5. turn to a life of crime v 开始罪恶的人生
　　6. conduct some anti-social offenses v 做出反社会行为 (亮点表达)：
　　7. commit crime = violate the law v 犯罪
　　8. domestic violence = family violence n 家庭暴力 (少年犯罪外因)
　　9. pornographic or bloody contents n 色情的血腥的内容 (少年犯罪外因)
　　10. blindly model after / imitate / mimic v盲目效仿……
　　11. to be led astray v 被引入歧途(推荐使用)
　　12. enact relevant legislations to crack down youth crime v颁布相关立法降低犯罪 (亮点表达)
　　13. has a deterrent role to play in …… 可以发挥一种威慑的作用 (处罚措施)
　　14. turn over a new leaf v生活展开新的一页
　　原创范文赏析：
　　布局图：
　　首段：背景介绍(个性开篇)+ 问题影响 + 作家立场(清晰表达)
　　二段：三个原因的展开(客观原因+主观原因)
　　三段： 三个处罚策略的展开(针对原因)
　　尾段：再次亮明观点
　　首段：背景介绍 + 问题影响 + 写作目的
　　Alarmingly, various misdeeds among teenagers, for example, school bullying or sex assault， are now becoming a big headache in many countries. Juvenile delinquency not only afflicts the victims but also jeopardizes the community. Many efforts have already been made on how to crack down juvenile crime, but, the effect is far from satisfying. This essay aims to explore the causes of teenage crime and then represent relevant measures of penalty.(71)
　　翻译：令人担忧的是，青少年的各种犯罪行为，例如校园欺凌，性侵犯等，成为很多国家头痛的问题。青少年犯罪不仅使受害者痛苦，也危及到社会稳定。我们已经做出诸多努力去减少青少年犯罪的数量，但是，效果不尽如人意，本文将努力探究青少年犯罪的原因，再提出相应的处罚措施。
　　词汇点评：
　　1. juvenile delinquency = teenage crime = youth crime n青少年犯罪
　　2. afflict v 使痛苦
　　3. jeopardizes the community = harms the society v 危害社会
　　4. crack down juvenile crime v降低青少年犯罪
　　5. measures of penalty = measures of punishment n 惩罚措施
　　二段：原因的展开
　　The potential reasons of teenage criminalities are complicated and manifold. First, it can be mainly owed to the disadvantaged family environment. Some teenage violators come from the violent or single-parent families. It is conceivable that teenagers growing up in such environment， in most cases， are more likely to be willful and cynical，consequently, they are more easily to be led astray. Still, the adverse effect of commercialized mass media is another factor to be considered. Nowadays, the Internet and videos are besieged with overflow of information on pornography, violence and crime. So curious are some youngsters that they might blindly duplicate everything they have seen including contents related to violence and sex. Virtually，these mental poisons have been seriously corrupting adolescents' innocent minds and arousing their violent impulse. Last, the rebellion of teenagers has resulted in their misconducts and made them conduct some anti-social offences, especially when a young man comes from baneful family background and is affected by mass media negatively. (166)
　　翻译：青少年犯罪的潜在根源复杂多元。第一，它由不良的家庭成长环境导致。 很多少年犯来着暴力或者单亲家庭。可以想象，成长在这样环境中的孩子们，通常更加任性和愤世。因此，他们容易走上犯罪道路。第二，媒体的不良影响是第二个不能忽视的因素，当前，网络和影视中，色情，暴力，犯罪信息泛滥。年轻人很好奇，他们易于盲目效仿一切，包括那些与性和暴力相关的事情。实际上，精神毒药一直在腐蚀青少年纯净的心灵。最后，青少年本身比较反叛，导致他们犯罪，尤其是当他们来自不良的家庭以及受到不良传媒的影响。
　　词汇点评
　　1. teenage criminalities n青少年犯罪
　　2. are complicated and manifold ……是复杂多元的
　　3. willful and cynical adj 任性的和愤世嫉俗的
　　4. commercialized mass media n商业化的大众传媒
　　5. are besieged with overflow of information on …… v 充斥着关于……的过量的信息
　　6. blindly duplicate v盲目效仿
　　三段：三种惩罚措施的展开
　　Considering the severity of youth crime, it is about time that we started adopting some effective measures of punishment. First, it is important for the government to enact relevant legislations to strengthen the censorship of the commercialized mass media. Meanwhile, it is governments' obligation to strictly penalize those websites or TV stations that disseminate vulgar, bloody and cruel information so that teenagers can stay away from those toxic contents. Also，as for some habitual young perpetrators, it works to impose stricter punishment, for example, it is feasible to prolong the imprisonment of hardened evildoers, which could exerts a deterrent effect on some potential law-breakers. Last, as the curators of children, parents have to assume the responsibility of educating and guiding their kids, so, parents should also be short-termed imprisoned if their children go and out the prison for several times. (142)
　　翻译： 考虑到青少年犯罪的严重性，我们应该采取有效的处罚措施。第一，政府应该立法加强对于大众传媒的审查，同时，政府应该严厉处罚传播不良信息，例如庸俗，血腥，残忍内容的网站和电视台，青少年会远离精神毒害。第二，对于少年惯犯，应该加大处罚力度，例如，对于屡教不改者延长刑期，这会对潜在的犯罪分子有心理威慑作用。第三，父母作为孩子的监管人，应该教育指导孩子，如果孩子们持续犯罪，父母应该受到连带处罚，例如短期监禁。
　　词汇点评：
　　1. It is about time that we started adopting some effective measures of …… 是我们采取……的有效措施的时候了(虚拟语气)
　　2. enact relevant legislations to v颁布相关立法去……
　　3. disseminate vulgar, bloody and cruel information 传播庸俗的血腥和残忍的信息
　　4. as the curators of children 作为孩子的监护人
　　5. exerts a deterrent effect on …… v 对于某人有威慑的作用;
　　尾段： 再次亮明观点
　　Overall, every approach I have suggested has its unique role, hence, joint efforts should be made by the government and parents. At the same time, every teenager who is in the formative year should establish right life outlook. (38)
　　翻译：我提出的每一种方法都其独有的作用，因此，政府和家长应该协同努力，同时，成长中的年轻人应该树立正确人生观。
　　备注：本文文风华丽，适合赏析，不适合考生仿写。
　　全文点评：文无定法，原创范文只是雅思写作之一种。本文首段亮剑，个性开篇。主题明确，论证饱满。词汇亮点(用词精准，丰富);句法变化。(用到倒装句，插入语，虚拟语气，形式主语，被动语态，现在完成进行时等)。符合雅思写作评分标准的高分要求，应该是8分以上的原创范文。