六级写作经典范文及点评:Why I Teach
日期:2009-05-05 14:32

(单词翻译:单击)

  教师,是一个崇高的职业。因为教师是为社会培养人才的园丁,是人类灵魂的工程师。那么,当一名老师又能给教师自己带来什么呢?


  Why I Teach

  I teach because I like the pace of the academic calendar. June, July, and August offer an opportunity for reflection, research and writing.

  I teach because teaching is a profession built on change. When the material is the same, I change — and, more important, my students change.

  I teach because I like the freedom to make my own mistakes, to learn my own lessons, to stimulate myself and my students. As a teacher, I’m my own boss. If I want my freshmen to learn to write by creating their own textbook, who is to say I can’t? Such courses may be huge failures, but we can all learn from failures.

  I teach because I like to ask questions that students must struggle to answer. The world is full of right answers to bad questions. While teaching, I sometimes find good questions.

  So teaching gives me pace and variety, and challenge, and the opportunity to keep on learning①.

  However, the most important reasons why I teach are that my students grow up and change in front of me. Some have become doctoral students with excellent success and found good jobs; some have become interested in the urban poor and served as civil rights lawyers; some have decided to finish high school and go to college.

  But teaching offers something besides money and power: it offers love. Not only the love of learning and of books and ideas, but also the love that a teacher feels for that rare student who walks into a teacher’s life and begins to breathe. Perhaps love is the wrong word: magic might be better.

  I teach because, being around people who are beginning to breathe, I occasionally find myself catching my breath with them.

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  行文点评

  文章第一段到第四段都采用了“I teach because...”的句型开头,句式统一,在内容上构成了并列。每段的第一句即为该段的主题句,先指出自己想要当老师的原因,接着再具体进行解释。在第五段中,作者用So概括了上述原因,再次重申“Why I Teach”,呼应主题。第六段开头借助“However”一词的过渡,指出教书最重要的理由,和前文构成了语义上的递进。文章最后一段还是用I teach because...结尾,与段首相呼应,使文章显得有始有终。

  好文妙译

  我为什么当老师

  我教书,是因为我喜爱学校日程的安排。六月、七月和八月这三个月的暑假提供了一个思考、研究和创作的机会。

  我教书,是因为教学是建立在变化基础上的职业。虽然教材还是原来的不变,但我自身却变了,更重要的是,我的学生变了。

  我教书,是因为我喜欢有让自己犯错的自由,喜欢自己吸取教训的自由,喜欢激励自己和激励学生的自由。作为教师,我可以自行做主。如果我想要求一年级学生通过自己编写课本的方法来学习写作,谁会说我不能那样做呢?这样的课程也许会彻底失败,但我们都可以从失败中获得教益。

  我教书,是因为我喜欢提出学生必须绞尽脑汁方能回答的问题。我们这个世界充满了对付拙劣问题的正确答案。我在教学过程中,有时也发现了一些好的问题。所以说,教书让生活变得有节奏、丰富多彩;教书向我提出了挑战,也给了我不断学习的机会。

  然而,我教书最重要的理由是,我的学生在我面前成长、发展、变化。有些学生成了成就斐然的博士,找到了好工作;有些对城市贫民发生了兴趣,当了维护公民权力的律师;有些决定读完高中后继续上大学。

  教书还带来了超越金钱和权力以外的东西:那便是爱。不仅是爱学习、爱书本、爱思想,还有老师对出类拔萃的学生的爱。这样的学生走进了老师的生活,开始成长起来。爱这个字也许用得不恰当,说是魔力也许更为贴切。

  我教书,是因为与开始成长的学生朝夕相处打成一片,我偶尔发现自己也和他们一起开始成长了。

  词汇斟酌

  calendar n. 日历,月历

  stimulate vt.刺激,激励

  freshman n. 新生, 大学一年级学生

  doctoral adj. 博士的

  佳句临摹

  ①【注释】keep on (doing sth)继续(做某事)

  【临摹】She kept on working although she was tired. 她累了,却仍在继续工作。

  思如泉涌

  Living without an aim is like sailing without a compass. 生活无目标,犹如航海无罗盘。

  A burden of one’s choice is not felt. 爱挑的担子不嫌重。

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重点单词
  • varietyn. 多样,种类,杂耍
  • reflectionn. 反映,映像,折射,沉思,影响
  • compassn. 指南针,圆规 vt. 图谋,包围,达成
  • calendarn. 日历,月历,日程表 vt. 把 ... 列入日程表
  • stimulatevt. 刺激,激励,鼓舞 vi. 起刺激作用
  • challengen. 挑战 v. 向 ... 挑战
  • occasionallyadv. 偶尔地
  • opportunityn. 机会,时机
  • academicadj. 学术的,学院的,理论的 n. 大学教师,
  • rareadj. 稀罕的,稀薄的,罕见的,珍贵的 adj. 煎得