托福分类话题写作每日一练 第10期
日期:2012-06-16 13:31

(单词翻译:单击)

早上好啦~AmyLee要认真规划好备考的每一天,你呢!非常感谢大家的陪伴,我们YY可可备考小组的成员越来越多了,不许偷懒,托福优秀范文一天写一篇学一篇哦,写好了可以发送至我邮箱keke3096@qq.com进行互批,共同进步!^^

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每天的写作任务是这样的,写好每天的作文发至我的邮箱(如果你想加入作文批改小组请注明),我们将进入互批作文模式。

在此我对每天的topic进行解析和范文精讲,请大家写完作文之后不忘进行比较,找出自己的不足之处。开始吧!

10. "When people succeed, it is because of hard work. Luck has nothing to do with success." Do you agree or disagree with the quotation above? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your answer.

参考分析:

  • nothing是一个绝对词,所以,不能完全同意也不能完全不同意。选择“很大程度上同意”。
  • 指出luck确实存在
  • 指出可能导致人们成功的若干原因:诚实、睿智、幽默;执著;肯于做不喜欢的事情[27];
相关题目:[27]、[63]

10、不同意,实际上运气在人成功的过程中也很重要
(1)先肯定努力是成功不可或缺的一部分。
(2)在找工作的过程中,同样优秀的人在申请工作的时候不一定就都会被接受,而两个人的人生道路就非常不同。或者从申请签证的角度来说也可以。
(3)别人帮助可以根本不费努力而成功

Topic 10 Luck and hard work

There is a humorous saying in English "The grass is always greener on the other side of the valley." The saying is used ironically(讽刺的)to point out that there is a temptation(引诱物)in us all to insist that others are more fortunate than we are. This isnowhere(一事无成)more true than on the question of luck and hard work. When faced with the "bad times", we often find comfort in the idea that we are special in our degree of misfortune. I feel that such an attitude is negative, and that it can bring only further misfortune.

Many famously successful people have begun from small origins. Mao wasthe son of a (modestly prosperous) peasant; the explorer Captain Cook was sopoor that, as a child, he had to work by day and study by night; many of the affluent Americans of today are the children of the poor immigrants of yesterday. Beethoven(贝多芬), it should be remembered, became deaf before the end of his career.There are many, many more people who have also made genuine, though Jess spectacular,successes against the odds.

Within his own terms, a person who is born into poverty(贫困的)in Indiais a great success if he manages to own a house in later life. Poverty cannot be reduced by merely complaining and blaming others: no matter how guilty other people are, each individual must reach out to success for himself. Indeed, some economists believe that the world operates by what they call "the rule ofthe jungle." They believe that in economics a person always attempts to gain profit from his neighbor: that given the chance the poor man would quickly make himself rich by trading to his own advantage.

Also, it is presumptuous(专横的)to judge another according tohis or her apparent fortune. No man can ever truly understand the sufferings of his neighbor. A man who appears comfortably rich may have suffered elsewhere in his life - through the death of a loved one, for example. Retired businessmen have often worked long hours in their youth. Surely, it must be wiser to respect achievement than to deny that anyone has achieved good in the world.

To rely on notions of luck - to believe that life is a kind of lottery(碰运气的事;彩票)- is an attempt to escape reality(是企图脱离现实的表现). Paradoxically,(自相矛盾地,相反地)the only time a person can claim that luck is moreimportant than work is when he reflects on his own success. Because of thatmodesty, the great man then becomes even greater.(小编认为文章作者用了很漂亮的例子,文章没有正面论证他的观点,而是通过许多伟人都知在逆境中努力获得成功,由此来证明lucky has nothing to do with success,我认为这样的写法非常体现作者的critical thinking和论证功底,用了很多高难词,希望大家把这篇文章拿下去好好学习一下

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重点单词
  • humorousadj. 幽默的,诙谐的
  • advantagen. 优势,有利条件 vt. 有利于
  • misfortunen. 不幸,灾祸
  • guiltyadj. 有罪的,内疚的
  • criticaladj. 批评的,决定性的,危险的,挑剔的 adj. 临
  • achievementn. 成就,成绩,完成,达到
  • temptationn. 诱惑,引诱
  • genuineadj. 真正的,真实的,真诚的
  • affluentadj. 富裕的 n. 支流
  • understandvt. 理解,懂,听说,获悉,将 ... 理解为,认为