2012年高考英语辽宁卷英语作文点评
日期:2015-06-23 09:27

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[2012年高考英语辽宁卷书面表达试卷原题]
假定你是某中学的学生李华。请用英语给出版社的编辑写一封信,表达你对现在使用的英语教材的看法,内容主要包括:
优点:
1. 话题广
2. 图片丰富;
3. 有助于提高学习兴趣。
建议:适当降低词汇难度。
注意:1. 词数100左右;
2. 可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯;
3. 开头语已为你写好,不计人总词数。
Dear Editor,
As a student reader, I am writing to talk about the English textbooks published by your house.
[2012年高考英语辽宁卷书面表达写作指导]
2012年高考英语辽宁卷书面表达选用的是半开放式、要点型说明文写作。题材不算新颖但贴近学生的实际生活,难度不大。要点明确,考生只要抓住要点进行适当的发挥即可。下面就2012年高考英语辽宁卷书面表达的写作技巧进行简单分析:
1. 段落和要点:本篇书面表达要求考生就现在使用的英语教材谈谈自己的看法。重点介绍英语教材的优点:(1)话题广泛;(2)图片丰富;(3)有助于提高学习兴趣。简要谈谈教材的缺点:生词较多,难理解等,并建议能降低词汇难度。
2. 时态:一般现在时;人称:第一人称 (表达自己的观点)
3. 可能运用的短语/句型
其中之一是...one of them is that....
话题广泛a variety of topics
很受学生们的欢迎be popular with students
图片丰富many beautiful and colorful pictures
生词 new words and expressions
4. 文章大纲:
段首句: As a student reader, I am writing to talk about the English textbooks published by your house.
中间段落句:
(1) These books have many advantages.
(2) One of them is that...such as...
(3) What's more, along with the texts there are many beautiful and colorful pictures...
(4) However, some of the texts have too many new words and expressions...Therefore...

[2012年高考英语辽宁卷书面表达范文展示]
Dear Editor,
As a student reader, I am writing to talk about the English textbooks published by your house.
These books have many advantages. (引出下文,条理清晰) One of them is that we can find a variety of topics (表语从句) , such as (举例说明,增强文章的说服力) science, culture and history. These topics, I think, are very popular with us students. What's more (关联词,衔接自然,增添文章的亮点) , along with the texts there are many beautiful and colorful pictures, which can help us understand English better(非限制性定语从句) . Even (连词) students who used to dislike English have turned out (固定短语) to be interested in the subject.
However (转折连词,引出教材的不足之处) , some of the texts have too many new words and expressions which are hard for us (定语从句) . Therefore (连词) , I'd like to suggest changing them into easier ones.
Best regards,
Li Hua


[2012年高考英语辽宁卷书面表达失分作文分析]
Dear Editor,
As a student reader, I am writing to talk about the English textbooks published by your house. I think (语言哕唆,可删除) these books have many advantages. One advantage is(缺少表语从句的连接词that) we can find many topics, such as science, culture and history. These topics, I think, are well welcomed by(生硬翻译,语言不地道,建议用are popular with,表示“受....的欢迎”) us students. The other advantage is that along with the texts there are many beautiful and colorful pictures, that (关联词使用错误。此句为非限制性定语从句,且从句中缺少主语,应用关系代词which引导) can help us understand English better. Besides, these books can also improve students' learning interest. (直译汉语,语言僵硬。建议:不必逐字翻译题中的写作要点,可灵活变化,换一种表达方式) However, some of the texts have too many new words and expressions which are hard for us. Therefore, I'd like to suggest changing them into easier ones.
Best regards,
Li Hua


结语:
2012年高考英语辽宁卷书面表达从素材上讲是属于典型的利弊说明型文章,学习者在进行此类文章的写作练习时需要掌握利弊说明文写作的常见模式。笔者建议大家参考本站文章网络的利弊英语作文模板及范文赏析进行对比学习。

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