2013年高考英语山东卷英语作文点评
日期:2015-06-30 09:13
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[2013年高考英语山东卷英语作文试卷原题]
[2013年高考英语山东卷英语作文写作指导]
2013年高考英语山东卷英语作文从命题思路上看完全没有新意，属于典型的老套模式：写一封电子邮件。
从内容要点上看，整个邮件回复内容包括两大块：一个是说明未能及时回复的原因，其二就是介绍假期的打算。都是属于最基础的表达内容，虽然有一定的发挥性，但难度确实很低，不具有新意，也没有挑战性。
从语言素材上看，2013年高考英语山东卷英语作文是回复一个电子邮件，由于电子邮件本身就属于非正式的文体，所以就没有特别的书面语使用的要求，只需要通顺连贯即可。本篇写作中可能运用的语言素材有：I am delighted to do sth.（由于...我很高兴）；I am sorry for sth.（由于...很抱歉）；be busy with sth.（忙于...）；prepare for（为...做准备）；earn my own living（自食其力）；face the world（见世面）；accumulate experience（积累经验）。
[2013年高考英语山东卷英语作文满分作文展示]
Dear Tom,
I'm glad to get your e-mail but sorry for not replying in time. I'm busy with my study recently, because this term is going to end. I have to prepare for the final-term exam.(开篇点题，说明未能及时回复的原因)
In your e-mail, you asked me my plan for the coming summer holiday. First, I'm going to get a part-time job to earn some money. Meanwhile, I can cumulate working experience. Second, I have to go over my lessons, which are the key task of me now. Last, maybe I'll tour to some places of interest, but Idon't know whether I have the chance and economic strength. (关联词使用合理，逐条陈述假期计划，使文章层次分明)
What about you? What will you do in your summer holiday? I hope you can reply me soon.
Thank you!
Yours,
Li Hua
[2013年高考英语山东卷英语作文失分作文分析]
Dear Tom,
What are you doing? (疑问词使用错误，此处是询问对方近况，疑问词应用How) You asked me in your last letter about my plan for the coming summer vacation. I am sorry that I didn't reply without delaying (词性错误，delay本身可以用作名词). How I wish I will read (动词错误，wish后宾语从句用虚拟语气，此处will应为would) and reply your email as soon as I received it. (冗余哕唆) However, I was busy preparing for my final exam at that time, which is vital for me. As a result, I had no choice but to completely focus on my study, for which I am very sorry. I hope you can understand me.
During the holiday, I am going to do a part-time job. On the one hand, I can earn some money to reduce the burden of my families (词形错误，family本身有“家人”之意，此处无需变为复数). On the other hand, I can accumulate the social experience, which does good to my future life. At the same time, I will not forget to go over my lessons. I will spend an unforgettable holiday. How will you spend your holiday? I hope you'll have a good time.
These are my plan (词形错误，应用复数) for the summer vacation. What's yours? I am looking forward to receive (词性错误，to是介词，故receive应用动名词形式) your earliest reply.
Yours,
Li Hua
[2013年高考英语山东卷英语作文写作指导]
2013年高考英语山东卷英语作文从命题思路上看完全没有新意，属于典型的老套模式：写一封电子邮件。
从内容要点上看，整个邮件回复内容包括两大块：一个是说明未能及时回复的原因，其二就是介绍假期的打算。都是属于最基础的表达内容，虽然有一定的发挥性，但难度确实很低，不具有新意，也没有挑战性。
从语言素材上看，2013年高考英语山东卷英语作文是回复一个电子邮件，由于电子邮件本身就属于非正式的文体，所以就没有特别的书面语使用的要求，只需要通顺连贯即可。本篇写作中可能运用的语言素材有：I am delighted to do sth.（由于...我很高兴）；I am sorry for sth.（由于...很抱歉）；be busy with sth.（忙于...）；prepare for（为...做准备）；earn my own living（自食其力）；face the world（见世面）；accumulate experience（积累经验）。
[2013年高考英语山东卷英语作文满分作文展示]
Dear Tom,
I'm glad to get your e-mail but sorry for not replying in time. I'm busy with my study recently, because this term is going to end. I have to prepare for the final-term exam.(开篇点题，说明未能及时回复的原因)
In your e-mail, you asked me my plan for the coming summer holiday. First, I'm going to get a part-time job to earn some money. Meanwhile, I can cumulate working experience. Second, I have to go over my lessons, which are the key task of me now. Last, maybe I'll tour to some places of interest, but Idon't know whether I have the chance and economic strength. (关联词使用合理，逐条陈述假期计划，使文章层次分明)
What about you? What will you do in your summer holiday? I hope you can reply me soon.
Thank you!
Yours,
Li Hua
[2013年高考英语山东卷英语作文失分作文分析]
Dear Tom,
What are you doing? (疑问词使用错误，此处是询问对方近况，疑问词应用How) You asked me in your last letter about my plan for the coming summer vacation. I am sorry that I didn't reply without delaying (词性错误，delay本身可以用作名词). How I wish I will read (动词错误，wish后宾语从句用虚拟语气，此处will应为would) and reply your email as soon as I received it. (冗余哕唆) However, I was busy preparing for my final exam at that time, which is vital for me. As a result, I had no choice but to completely focus on my study, for which I am very sorry. I hope you can understand me.
During the holiday, I am going to do a part-time job. On the one hand, I can earn some money to reduce the burden of my families (词形错误，family本身有“家人”之意，此处无需变为复数). On the other hand, I can accumulate the social experience, which does good to my future life. At the same time, I will not forget to go over my lessons. I will spend an unforgettable holiday. How will you spend your holiday? I hope you'll have a good time.
These are my plan (词形错误，应用复数) for the summer vacation. What's yours? I am looking forward to receive (词性错误，to是介词，故receive应用动名词形式) your earliest reply.
Yours,
Li Hua
结语：
2013年高考英语山东卷英语作文是一个非常普通的话题，素材非常贴近学生的真实生活，但新意不足。考生在应对这类英语作文的时候，最主要的目标是保证语言无误，逻辑通畅，就可以赢得高分。
