专八改错训练附讲解100篇:Passage 4
日期:2016-01-01 16:56

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短文改错

David Cameron has noticed that health and safety regulations stop schools taking children out on field trips, outdoor activities or just collect autumn leaves down the local park. (1)____ And the Department for Children, Schools and Families is to issue guidelines about extra-curricular activities, with aiming to get pupils out of classrooms and back into the real world.(2)____
I suppose school- organized, adult-supervised activities are better than nothing. And they're really not good enough.(3)____ (4)____ Indeed, excess health and safety measures at school are just the tip of the risk aversion iceberg leaving increasing numbers of young people without the emotional resilience, social competence and personal confidence to thrive in our society. The Institute for Public Research couple of years ago, found British youngsters at or near the top of the European charts for almost every type of teenage misconduct.(5)____ Nothing is mightily wrong with childhood in Britain, and after thirty years working with children and teachers (the last eight years which were spent researching 'toxic childhood'), I reckon my risk aversion-not just in schools but in every area of life-is a major part of the problem.(6)____ (7)____ (8)____
A combination of parental anxiety, community intolerance and all-pervasive risk aversion now threaten the mental and physical health of the next generation.(9)____ This is becoming a matter of urgency that we reclaim public space for our children and reclaim skills that came naturally to our ancestors.(10)____

答案解析
文章大意
本文讨论的是英国人对孩子童年时期的过度保护。过多的安全考虑不仅仅限制了孩子的课外活动,而且使越来越多的青少年缺少情感的应变能力、社交能力和自信心。正是我们对孩子的这种风险规避,威胁着孩子的身心健康。当务之急就是要还给孩子足够的空间,让他们自然地学会各种技能。
答案详解
1.collect→collecting词汇错误。这里的collect autumn leaves应该和taking children out on field trips,outdoor activities并列,都是stop的宾语,而stop sb. doing sth.表示“阻止某人做某事”,根据此结构,故用collecting。
2.with→with语法错误。本句的主语是the Depart-ment for Children, Schools and Families(英国儿童、学校和家庭部),aim to这一动作的施动者也是相同的主语,故直接用aim的现在分词形式表示伴随,不需要加介词with。
3.And→But语篇错误。从上下文的语义来判断,句间的逻辑关系应为转折关系。前面一
句说到“我想学校有组织、有成人监督的活动,有总比没有好。”本句刚说“他们真的不好”,前后意思相悖,重在强调后者,故用But。
4.excess→excessive词汇错误。excess作形容词表示“额外的,附加的”,而这里强调
的是学校对孩子的过分保护,健康和安全措施并不是在量上太多,而是强调程度上“过分的,过度的”,故用excessive更合适。
5.∧couple→a词汇错误。couple是名词表示“两个,一对”,前面必须加冠词,而a couple of是固定表达,表示“不确定的小数目”,这里表示“几年前”。
6.Nothing→Something语篇错误。上文讲述的是英国人对青少年的过度保护并不好,使他们缺少情感的应变能力、社交能力和自信心,另外又接着说,英国青少年行为不端名列榜首,下文则是作者对这个问题的分析,认为这是我们的风险规避所致。因此总的来说,英国孩子们的童年是有问题的,故将Nothing改为Something。
7.∧which→of语法错误。括号中的句子是定语从句,先行词是thirty years,而从句的主语正好是the last eight years,两者构成所属关系,应该加介词of,本句意为“30年中的最后8年是用来研究有害的童年”。
8.my→our词汇错误。表面上看本句主语是I,故相应的物主代词应该是my,但是从全文来判断,对孩子的过度保护和风险规避并不是某个人的行为,更不是作者自己的行为,而是整个社会现象,故物主代词用our更合适。
9.threaten→threatens语法错误。本句主语是A comb
ination of,表示“……的结合”,是单数意义的名词短语,故谓动词threaten也要用单数形式。
10.This→It语法错误。本句真正的主语是that we reclaim... to our ancestors,而This不能用作形式主语,应改成It。

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重点单词
  • thrivevi. 兴旺,繁荣,茁壮成长
  • instituten. 学会,学院,协会 vt. 创立,开始,制定
  • competencen. 能力,管辖权,技能
  • combinationn. 结合,联合,联合体
  • urgencyn. 紧急(的事)
  • issuen. 发行物,期刊号,争论点 vi. & vt 发行,流
  • socialadj. 社会的,社交的 n. 社交聚会
  • toxicadj. 有毒的 n. 有毒物质
  • communityn. 社区,社会,团体,共同体,公众,[生]群落
  • excessn. 过量,超过,过剩 adj. 过量的,额外的