So, what is the problem?
Once you have your opinion, once you've decided agree or disagree, say so once. Okay?
Use this pronoun: "I agree", "I think", "I believe", "In my opinion" one time in the entire essay.
这些代词"I agree", "I think", "I believe", "In my opinion"在整篇作文里只用一次。
Do not say: "I think" two, three, four times, don't say it twice in the introduction, and then again in the conclusion.
Say it one time in the introduction if that's where your thesis is.
That's it, you're done, don't use the word: "I", "my", "me", "mine" any more in your essay.
就这样，结束，不要再在你们的作文里用"I", "my", "me", "mine"这样的单词了。
The only time you can repeat the personal pronoun is if you have a very personal task question.
Would you prefer to live in the city or the country?
Okay, in that case, you can use "I", or "me", or "my" a few times, but even then, you don't need to, so don't.
One time, give me your opinion, that's it, don't give me any more.
Now, what happens is I see quite often in the introduction, I see people say: "I think that A, B, C, which is why I believe C, D, E, F." Whatever.
事情是，我经常在开头看见，我看见人们说：“我觉得A, B, C，所以我认为C, D, E, F. ”什么的。
Well, what is your thesis?
Is it the first one or the second one? Right?
Usually it will be a bit clear what you're trying to say, but the fact that you say two opinions makes your thesis weak,
because I'm not sure, you're not taking a very firm stance.
If you think A, B, C, which is why you believe D, E, F, well, you only think A, B, C, which is not a very strong support for D, E, F or believing D, E, F.
如果你们觉得A, B, C，所以认为D, E, F，那你们认为的只有A, B, C，而这对D, E, F或认为D, E, F并没有很强的支持。
Have one firm expression: "I think" something, done.
Support it the rest of the essay, in the conclusion, you can restate that opinion,
but you don't have to say: "That is why I think", "In conclusion, I think this because that", no.
但你们不必说："That is why I think", "In conclusion, I think this because that"，不要这么说。
"In conclusion, parents make the best teachers for several reasons, including knowledge of their child and..."
"In conclusion, parents make the best teachers for several reasons, including knowledge of their child and..."（综上所述，家长是最好的老师，原因包括对他们孩子的了解......）
whatever your second body paragraph was, I don't know, everybody has different ideas.
One time in the whole essay, that's it.
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