写作题目分析

写作题目：

2013年11月9日雅思写作Task2真题解析附范文

Young people who commit serious crimes, such as robbery or violent attacks should be punished in the same way as adults.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?

题目讲解：

题型：辩论型
类别：犯罪类话题
题目解释：年轻人犯了重罪是否应该和成人接受的惩罚是一样的？
分段解析：
1.Introduction
大家首先需要想想为什么会有这种建议。不难看出主要的原因就是为了减少青少年的犯罪率，所以我们可以在第一段里写现在青少年犯罪率攀升（crime rate），为了遏制这种情况有人提出题目里说的东西（大家要改题哦。最简单的方式就是把动词punish改称名词punishment）。注意：大家在写开头段时不需要想一些无聊的套句，如随着社会的发展等等。
2.Positive sides
思路：先反着想——为什么青少年受到的处罚比成人轻？因为他们年幼无知。所以为了反驳次论点我们说青少年现在接受的关于法律的教育很多或很深刻，犯罪时他们是知道自己要面对的后果的。当然严重的惩罚也会对他人有个警示的作用。
关键词句推荐：be aware of. Realization. consequences. Profound. Be a deterrent to.
3.Negative sides
思路：大家需要把重点放在“年轻”二字上。设身处地的想想如果你是十七八岁的少年，受到这么严重的处罚会是何等心情？所以年轻人需要有一个重生的机会。此外，不是所有的青少年都有受教育的机会。那些因为贫穷而没有受到教育的孩子怎么办？此时大家想想美国贫民窟的黑人孩子。
关键词句推荐： rehabilitate. Deny sb of sth. Living conditions. Leniency.
4. Conclusion
表达自己的观点，并总结一下自己不同意的观点及解决方案。

写作参考范文

参考范文：

Crimes can be detestable, while minor offenders and their crimes are from time to time treated with leniency. Thus, some argue that laws should not discriminate, and equally punish minor criminals—an opinion that this essay is against.

To begin with, minors are yet to approach their maturity, and their crimes, albeit serious, should be punished with the consideration of their young age. Internationally speaking, countries might define the start of adulthood differently—18 being the most common—but they commonly believe that there is a distinction between minor crimes and adult crimes. Minors are likely to be given a better chance for rehabilitation when they commit crimes because of their inexperience of life and possibly better life prospects. In that case, milder punishments are inflicted onjuvenile delinquents: lesser sentencing and relatively less harsh correction facilities are introduced in their cases.

Moreover, considering the correction process, minor offenders should not be punished equally as adult criminals. Despite the above-mentioned arguments that are in young offenders' defense, crimes, especially felonies by minors, deserve heavy punishment to deter crimes and reduce the harm of those crimes to the society. However, sending minors to adult prison might entailunexpectedly negative results. First, minors are naturally closer to more sophisticated criminals and crimes, which aggravate juvenile delinquency. Second, when in adult correctional facilities, young criminals might be threatened by assaults by adult prisoners, mostly sexually,which is nowhere closer to the purpose of rehabilitation.

In sum, law breakers, be they minors or not, should be punished for their wrongdoings, but lesser sentences and special correctional facilities might be more reasonable and helpful.